Unnecessary Words

Bad: Our proposal follows the sequential itemization of points occurring elsewhere in your RFP, wherever possible, to facilitate your review.

Good: We will follow your outline.

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Bad: Evaluation and Parametrization of Stability and Safety Performance Characteristics of Two and Three Wheeled Vehicular Toys for Riding.

Good: Why Children Fall Off Bicycles.

general consensus of opinion = consensus

hot water heater = water heater

eliminate completely = eliminate

chief protagonist = protagonist

temporary reprieve = reprieve

may possibly = may

small in size = small

absolutely essential = essential

future plans = plans

advance warning = warning

spell out in detail = spell out

completely unanimous = unanimous

various different = different

complete monopoly = monopoly

whether or not = whether

it is often the case that = frequently

in the event that = if

be of the opinion that = believe

be in possession of = have

owing to the fact that = since or because

the fact that he had arrived = his arrival

on the order of = about

in advance of = before

in spite of the fact that = although

is indicative of = indicates

had occasion to be = was

put in an appearance = appeared

take into consideration = consider