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Bad: Our proposal follows the sequential itemization of points occurring elsewhere in your RFP, wherever possible, to facilitate your review. Good: We will follow your outline. -------------- Bad: Evaluation and Parametrization of Stability and Safety Performance Characteristics of Two and Three Wheeled Vehicular Toys for Riding. Good: Why Children Fall Off Bicycles. Better word substitutions:
general consensus of opinion = consensus hot water heater = water heater eliminate completely = eliminate chief protagonist = protagonist temporary reprieve = reprieve may possibly = may small in size = small absolutely essential = essential future plans = plans advance warning = warning spell out in detail = spell out completely unanimous = unanimous various different = different complete monopoly = monopoly whether or not = whether it is often the case that = frequently in the event that = if be of the opinion that = believe be in possession of = have owing to the fact that = since or because the fact that he had arrived = his arrival on the order of = about in advance of = before in spite of the fact that = although is indicative of = indicates had occasion to be = was put in an appearance = appeared take into consideration = consider |